Did some more editing. I am still having trouble with the flow and foreshadowing in the central section of the chapter. I made some changes, made some notes for more changes, but I do not know if it will be enough.

The prose is better here than it was earlier on, but the structure and transitions are weaker. Will work a little longer and then go to bed - I had a couple of naps today and am well into my second wind.

And back to work